Mark330d
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Registered: 25th Apr 06
Location: Netherlee, Glasgow City
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Just typed my first cv/job application thing to try and get an apprenticeship for when im 16. It would be great if use could look over it and make sure it doesnt sound stupid or anything. Suggestions on anything else to add are welcomed. And btw thanks to who ever i stole the wee middle bit off. Anyway here it is:
************,
Netherlee
Glasgow
G44 3**
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am fifteen years old and I currently attend Clydebank College where I am doing a VRQ Level one and two (Vocationally Related Qualification) in Motor Vehicle Mechanics. I am committed to furthering my knowledge in this field and will embrace any opportunity to do so. Presently, I am also studying Standard Grade English (credit level)
I am an enthusiastic, self motivated individual who is capable of working in a team or on my own initiative. I am keen to undertake new challenges and I possess a number of general skills which I believe would be of value to any employer. I have the ability to communicate with people on various levels and can adapt quickly to any given situation. I would consider myself to be hard working, honest and loyal and see all my duties through to completion. I am capable of working unsupervised, able to learn new procedures quickly, a strong team player and I am able to work effectively under pressure. Being articulate, computer literate, a good listener and an adept problem solver are skills which have enabled me to maximise an excellent learning experience at college.
In my leisure time, I regularly attend many car shows and I also rebuild engines at home with the aid of guides on the internet to practise skills I have already learned at college.
My earlier secondary education was at St Aloysius College where I participated in many extra curricular activities such as rugby and debating. My studies at Clydebank are completed in June although I will turn sixteen in May.
I believe that if I am granted an interview with your (dealership/company) you will be impressed by my enthusiasm and motivation to work in such an environment. This would allow me to achieve my full potential and be a valuable asset to your (dealership/company)
References:
Michele Downes EVIP
136 Stanley Street
Kinning Park
Glasgow
07717630***
(0141) 276 ****
Clydebank College
Motor Vehicle Section
Curriculum Leader
**cairns@clydebank.ac.uk
Yours Faithfully
Mark Grimley
Mobile: 07852349***
Home: 0141 571 ****
Email: mark330d@hotmail.co.uk
thanks
m.
[Edited on 15-01-2007 by Mark330d]
[Edited on 15-01-2007 by Mark330d]
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stuartmitchell
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Registered: 24th Apr 04
Location: Kirkliston, Edinburgh
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Better than most of my candidates and they are twice your age  
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Jules S
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Registered: 24th Dec 03
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I'm not sure whether your PC has taken the line breaks out....and I've not read the content, but it will read much better with some paragraphs in it............
Netherlee
Glasgow
G44 3**
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am fifteen years old and I currently attend Clydebank College where I am doing a VRQ Level one and two (Vocationally Related Qualification) in Motor Vehicle Mechanics. I am committed to furthering my knowledge in this field and will embrace any opportunity to do so. Presently, I am also studying Standard Grade English (credit level)
I am an enthusiastic, self motivated individual who is capable of working in a team or on my own initiative. I am keen to undertake new challenges and I possess a number of general skills which I believe would be of value to any employer. I have the ability to communicate with people on various levels and can adapt quickly to any given situation. I would consider myself to be hard working, honest and loyal and see all my duties through to completion. I am capable of working unsupervised, able to learn new procedures quickly, a strong team player and I am able to work effectively under pressure.
Being articulate, computer literate, a good listener and an adept problem solver are skills which have enabled me to maximise an excellent learning experience at college.
In my leisure time, I regularly attend many car shows and I also rebuild engines at home with the aid of guides on the internet to practise skills I have already learned at college.
My earlier secondary education was at St Aloysius College where I participated in many extra curricular activities such as rugby and debating. My studies at Clydebank are completed in June although I will turn sixteen in May.
I believe that if I am granted an interview with your (dealership/company) you will be impressed by my enthusiasm and motivation to work in such an environment. This would allow me to achieve my full potential and be a valuable asset to your (dealership/company)
References:
Michele Downes EVIP
136 Stanley Street
Kinning Park
Glasgow
07717630***
(0141) 276 ****
Clydebank College
Motor Vehicle Section
Curriculum Leader
**cairns@clydebank.ac.uk
Yours Faithfully
Mark Grimley
Mobile: 07852349***
Home: 0141 571 ****
Email: mark330d@hotmail.co.uk
thanks
m.
Ive read it now and thats much better
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Mark330d
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Registered: 25th Apr 06
Location: Netherlee, Glasgow City
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i did have it in neat paragraphs but when i copied it, it all fecked up. thanks for the input.
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Jules S
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Registered: 24th Dec 03
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quote:
Originally posted by Mark330d
i did have it in neat paragraphs but when i copied it, it all fecked up. thanks for the input.
Fairplay then.
It reads very well....and a credit to you
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Wrighty_1988
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Registered: 30th Jun 06
Location: South Yorkshire
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Too much to read, the person that reads the applications wont bother to read all of that.
Heres mine.
Curriculum Vitae
Joseph Wright
*****holme Close
Hatfield
Doncaster
South Yorkshire
DN7 ***
Tel (Home): (01405)
Email: joewright91@hotmail.com
Profile
I am a conscientious worker who is always keen to learn. I have good team working skills as well as being very capable as an individual. My current role at Barriecars petrol station has given me the ability to work in a small team, as well as enabling me to work with the public. I am looking for a career that will continue to challenge me and allow me to learn new skills.
Personal Details
Date of Birth: 30/09/88
Marital status: Single
Education
At the moment I am still in education at Hatfield Visual Arts College. The GCSE examinations will finish in approximately 3 months, here are my predicted grades.
Mathematics: A
English: A
English Literature: B
Science: B
GCSE Art: B
Ethics: C
History: C
Geography: C
Intermediate GNVQ ICT: M
Employment History
Barriecars petrol station (2004 – Present)
Role: Petrol station attendant.
Key skills I have gained:
• Talking to customers with confidence.
• The ability to work in a small team.
• I have developed the skill and confidence to be left in charge of the station.
• Handling Money.
• Multitasking.
• Time Management
• Can follow instructions given by senior members.
British School of Motoring (BSM) (2004)
Role: Office Assistant.
This was a school work experience placement where I was based in a small office.
Key skills that I gained:
• Filing.
• Answering phones and dealing with customers telephone queries.
• Advising customer on the BSM services available.
• Ability to work in a small team.
Hobbies and Interests
ICT and snooker.
References:
Michael Engledow Mr Coady
Barriecars Ltd Hatfield Visual Arts College
High Street Ash Hill Road
Dunsville Hatfield
Doncaster Doncaster
DN7 *** DN7 ***
South Yorkshire South Yorkshire
Tel: (01302) Tel: (01302)
Mobile: 07836
Going back at least 2 years this tho.
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Jules S
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Registered: 24th Dec 03
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Funny that,
Whilst I enjoyed reading the first CV from top to bottom I got bored of your after a few lines.....
Then I started noticing the errors in grammar etc
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sriangel
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Registered: 12th Apr 06
Location: ayrshire, Scotland
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i think it sounds good and any employer that reads it should be impressed
well done
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Mark330d
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Registered: 25th Apr 06
Location: Netherlee, Glasgow City
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I just got my end of term report from college and it is very very good. Only negative is i have 92% attendance. I have been in 47 days out of a total 51. Think it would be a good idea to enclose a copy of this along with my cv?
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Wrighty_1988
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Registered: 30th Jun 06
Location: South Yorkshire
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No need to send that, if they have anything about them they are going to phone up your college anyways. Let them find out that way and if they dont ask it doesnt mater 
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