JonnyJ
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Just doing a brief for uni for Feel Good Drinks. All the brief says is to use their slogan "Spreading the feelgoodness" however you like. Just come up with a little design today, wondered what everyone thought of it.
The idea is the bottle is packed with stuff that makes you feel good and is exploding onto the page.
Anyway:
[Edited on 20-02-2008 by JonnyJ]
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Robin
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Looks a bit, erm.... gay? 
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Shane
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quote:
Originally posted by Robin
Looks a bit, erm.... gay?
you must feel right at home then 
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JonnyJ
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Excellent 
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Ian
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Looks good but I would perhaps introduce a bit more contrast between the objects near the top of the bottle. From a distance it is just a mass of colour with not much definition on the arrows.
Works well though. Certainly satisfies the brief.
[Edited on 17-02-2008 by Ian]
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Tommy L
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aww thats nice
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CorsAsh
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Looks gay, but right for the product. Speak to Alleh, she needs something doing and you'll be better at it than me...
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Hoddo
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what typeface is that at the bottom?
Not sure about the green arrow, I feel it might work slightly transparent? or maybe even a more matching colour
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JonnyJ
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Originally posted by CorsAsh
Looks gay, but right for the product. Speak to Alleh, she needs something doing and you'll be better at it than me...
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Hoddo
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quote:
Originally posted by Ian
Looks good but I would perhaps introduce a bit more contrast between the objects near the top of the bottle. From a distance it is just a mass of colour with not much definition on the arrows.
Works well though. Certainly satisfies the brief.
[Edited on 17-02-2008 by Ian]
lol, you worded it better 
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Hammer
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I reckon the bottle could be doing with being bigger i.e. the focal point
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CorsAsh
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quote:
Originally posted by JonnyJ
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Originally posted by CorsAsh
Looks gay, but right for the product. Speak to Alleh, she needs something doing and you'll be better at it than me...
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It's graphic, but not explicit. Ask for her briefs.
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Paul_J
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I can't believe they gave you the slogan
"spreading the feelgoodness"
Sounds so grammatically incorrect.
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Hoddo
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quote:
Originally posted by Hammer
I reckon the bottle could be doing with being bigger i.e. the focal point
yeah, seems a bit lost near the neck of the bottle
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JonnyJ
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quote:
Originally posted by Ian
Looks good but I would perhaps introduce a bit more contrast between the objects near the top of the bottle. From a distance it is just a mass of colour with not much definition on the arrows.
Works well though. Certainly satisfies the brief.
[Edited on 17-02-2008 by Ian]
Yeah i know what you mean, ill see what i can do
Having so much colour was always going to be an issue, ive been messing around with things all day
Hoddo - Typeface is ITC Kristen
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CorsAsh
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quote:
Originally posted by Paul_J
I can't believe they gave you the slogan
"spreading the feelgoodness"
Sounds so grammatically incorrect.
It's wrong so it sticks in your head I guess.
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JonnyJ
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quote:
Originally posted by Paul_J
I can't believe they gave you the slogan
"spreading the feelgoodness"
Sounds so grammatically incorrect.
Is there any wonder kids cant spell nowadays
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Hammer
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It's the companies moniker is it not?
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Ian
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Not sure I would have the flower and star so close to it either.
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JonnyJ
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Yep
http://www.feelgooddrinks.com/
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JonnyJ
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Originally posted by Ian
Not sure I would have the flower and star so close to it either.
Move further away or ditch them/one. Im not too keen on the flower myself.
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Hoddo
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bottom left flower by typeface isn't needed. I think the slogan should contrast nicely but not be involved in the busyness. purely linked by contrast.
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JonnyJ
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Very good point Hoddo. Noted
Good stuff so far guys cheers. I like to hear other peoples views as when your designing something for ages you get sucked into it and you can see the whole picture.
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Hoddo
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I love the Crits we do at Uni, we meet up 2/3 times a project in small groups of 8 or so and crit each others ideas. I really enjoy it.
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Hoddo
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I think if you wanted to keep the star with the slogan then maybe have one around where the flower is but maybe a different colour.
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